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I searched for an existing string, but couldn't find one. I wanted to post this poem, so I began a new one. Hope you enjoy!!

Cancer in the Seed

In the seed of a grape on a trunck in arrays,
I remember how it felt when we’d split separate ways,
traipsing rows in the clos, soaked in yellow, summer days,
how we’d pine for each other, like the moon through a phase.

Prune a cane as we’d clip, twine the shoots in different ways,
pluck the berries by the bunch, long for cooler, autumn days,
laughing out, as we mused, this was merely just a phase,
soon we’d harvest all the vines from the trellis in arrays.

Then we’d crush into must, pressing purple juice for days,
and relish how we’d swoon in the taste-arresting phase,
drain the wine from the casks, line the bottles in arrays,
stack the cellar with the fifths, much like bees in their ways.

But the pipe cracks a leak in the fermentation phase,
as we seep through the lees, over argols in arrays,
just as cancer in the skin tends to kill in killer ways,
and the time we loved best were those early, yellow days.

--Jared Baxter
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this group of wine lovers has got to tip the scale as the funniest, most hilarious, classy riff-raff on the internet. Edgar Allen Poe-esque wine poetry, unflinching wit-filled criticism, tireless protectors of the new and unitiated... it is like a whitman sampler of soap opera slapdash.

I'm quitting my job and becoming a regular!
The rain came down upon my head
Unshelter'd- and the heavy wind
Rendered me mad and deaf and blind.
It was but man, I thought, who shed
Laurels upon me: and the rush-
The torrent of the chilly air
Gurgled within my ear the crush
Of empires- with the captive's prayer-
The hum of suitors- and the tone
Of flattery 'round a sovereign's throne.

My passions, from that hapless hour,
Usurp'd a tyranny which men
Have deem'd, since I have reach'd to power,
My innate nature- be it so:
But father, there liv'd one who, then,
Then- in my boyhood- when their fire
Burn'd with a still intenser glow,
(For passion must, with youth, expire)
E'en then who knew this iron heart
In woman's weakness had a part.
-excerpt from Tamerlane by Edgar Allen Poe.

His early use of color,simple lyrical floe, and soap opera angst simply seem to share some traits.
IMHO anyway...
I realized I posted an earlier version of this poem by mistake. Perhaps this fix in the last stanza will convert the cretinous know-nothings, but I won't hold out for hope.


--But the pipe cracked a leak in the fermentation phase
and we seeped through the lees over argols in arrays,
just like cancer in the cell tends to spread in lethal ways,
and the time we love best were those early, yellow days.
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Originally posted by jbax:
I realized I posted an earlier version of this poem by mistake. Perhaps this fix in the last stanza will convert the cretinous know-nothings, but I won't hold out for hope.


Don't boo the judges.

We have a Simon Cowell programme on here, called the X-Factor. It is always notable that those who he criticises adversely, always insult him afterwards. If you don't want to look a pillock on telly, don't audition for the X-Factor.

Did I mention Stays, Frays, Phrase, Prays and Crays, not to mention hip-hip-hoorays?
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Originally posted by KillerB:
quote:
Originally posted by jbax:
I realized I posted an earlier version of this poem by mistake. Perhaps this fix in the last stanza will convert the cretinous know-nothings, but I won't hold out for hope.


Don't boo the judges.

We have a Simon Cowell programme on here, called the X-Factor. It is always notable that those who he criticises adversely, always insult him afterwards. If you don't want to look a pillock on telly, don't audition for the X-Factor.

Did I mention Stays, Frays, Phrase, Prays and Crays, not to mention hip-hip-hoorays?


KillerB,

Don't you mean the Krays?

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